Thursday, December 3, 2015

Thesis- Women in India

Women in India are often exposed to oppression and violence through rape culture and the traditional cultures that are practiced in their society; As a result, this is preventing their developing country to further progress and advance into a developed country.

3 comments:

  1. You did a good job explaining your side of the argument in your thesis. It is concise and to the point. A minor edit you may want to make is that using the word "culture" twice in your thesis sounds a little awkward. Also I would remove the "as a result" and instead try a smoother transition. Overall it is a strong thesis and gets the reader's attention.

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  2. I agree with Ben, this thesis is very well written and orchestrated perfectly. However, it seems like it may have been able to be written with a little less choppiness. Overall, it's a great thesis nonetheless.

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  3. Great ideas but you need to fix up the grammar...

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